Draft Intro to my Poetry Chapbook

Forgiveness lesson from flowers

(Photo credit: juliejordanscott)

I am working on a poetry chapbook. I now have a draft of the intro to the book — very rough, but I thought I’d share.

It’s about love and memory, loss and forgiveness.

What does it mean to be forgiven? What does it mean to be forsaken? Can you ever truly forgive or forsake someone? Is loss permanent?

What does it mean to live on the edges of society? What do the edges look like? Can someone safe in the middle of their society ever truly understand someone on the margins? What does it feel like to be catapaulted from the middle to the edge? What does it feel like to put yourself there? If you are on the margins, can you get back to the middle? Do you want to?

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Sunday Service: Singing: Draft 2 #poetry

Singing together, voices rise in
Community and harmony
Sharing a song, sharing worship
Perfect communion of life, love, and spirit

Community and harmony
Binding together these people in this building
Perfect communion of life, love, and spirit
For these few precious Sunday moments.

Binding together these people in this building
Setting aside all differences
For these few precious Sunday moments
Blending voices in songs of love

Sharing a song, sharing worship
Singing together, voices rise in
Setting aside all differences,
Blending voices in songs of love.

Tuesday Treasure: Hope Collage

I am listing my art collages in my Etsy store again! I used to list them, then I decided to try listing the collages in another online venue (which didn’t bring any sales). So I am bringing the collages back to the Etsy store and adding more, never before listed ones too (soon!).

Today, I re-listed the Hope collage.

An art collage of found objects

Hope Art Collage
{Click the image to view the Etsy listing}

My collages begin with a found object, or two. Then I create a story about that object, and pull together other found objects in order to tell that story and create an aesthetically pleasing arrangement.

In the Hope collage, the story I am telling is of falling in love young, and building a life together, despite the uncertainties, symbolized by the dice.

I really like it, I hope you do too.

Breath: A Poem #poetry

Out driving with my girl
In the hills east of town
Through the glowing afternoon
The sunlight reflects from storm clouds
Gathering over the mountains
Over the hills invisibly flowing and crumpling
Higher, ever higher. When we are gone past memory,
Mountains will rise here.
Sunlight slides into storm,
Our time here is as fleeting as a breath.
Crow lifts off from a fencepost,
Dives into the wheat field, and is gone.

Wordless Wednesday: Bug Tableau #1 Strawberries

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Sunday Surprise: Cooling the Flames

More cool items from the Etsy DTeam:

‘Cooling the flames’ by lizbethsgarden

A collection of items from the Etsy D-Listers


Oven Mitt, Red Hot…

$10.00

Handmade Pottery Ce…

$15.00

Set of 6 Coasters -…

$12.00

This Ain’t My F…

$30.00

Homemade Play Dough…

$9.00

Red and Black Beade…

$30.00

Crochet Cabled Pump…

$28.00

Owl Ornament in Gre…

$7.00

Ceramic Keepsake Bo…

$15.00

Long Tassel Chain E…

$17.00

Rustic rectangle ea…

$20.00

Original Painting, …

$11.95

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Tuesday Treasure: Chocolate Cherry Beaded Tassel

Looking at this tassel always makes me hungry: the colors of thread and beads remind me of nothing so much as chocolate covered cherries. Yum!

Tiered Red Beaded Tassel (Chocolate Cherries) {Click the image to view the Etsy listing}

The Man in White: Evolution of a Poem through Three Forms

Trigger warning.

This poem started out in answer to a prompt at Daily Writing Practice as a quick little poem.

Lurking in the corners of your mind
He was never there until the day you weren’t
Now he won’t leave you alone
In a moment of inattention
He springs and brings the memories flooding back.

Not bad, but it felt unfinished and rough. One of the other writers over at Daily Writing Practice commented that he especially liked the second line. So I set out to finish the poem, keeping the second line. I thought perhaps it would work well as a pantoum.

Lurking in the corners of your mind
He was never there until the day you weren’t
Now he won’t leave you alone
He springs and brings the nightmares flooding back.

He was never there until the day you weren’t
Just when you think you’ve forgotten
He springs and brings the nightmares flooding back
Of explosions and pain and a small girl dying in your arms

Just when you think you’ve forgotten
There he is in the shadows, bearing memories
Of explosions and pain and a small girl dying in your arms
Will you ever truly forget?

Now he won’t leave you alone
Lurking in the corners of your mind
There he is in the shadows, bearing memories
Will you ever truly forget?

I felt it was much improved, but the pantoum form was too repetitious and too pat, especially towards the end. I made it much more explicitly about war and PTSD, moving farther away from my own experience.

I thought perhaps a cascade or villanelle would do well, keeping some of the repetition but making it much less pat. First, I tried it as a cascade.

Lurking in the corners of your mind
He was never there until the day you weren’t
Now he won’t leave you alone

Just when you think you’ve forgotten
He springs and the nightmares come flooding back
Lurking in the corners of your mind

There he is in the shadows, bearing memories
Of explosions and pain, a small girl dying in your arms
He was never there until the day you weren’t

Can you forget?
Will you ever forget?
Now he won’t leave you alone.

I felt it was much, much better, but still in need of work. It still seemed too pat at the end, and to not have enough repetition, and it wasn’t flowing quite right. Plus it was still farther away from my own experience than I like. I thought I would try a villanelle. I won’t bore you with the initial versions, but here is the final villanelle I wrote. As I wrote it, I found the parts that were not from my experience fell away, and I reached for words and phrases much closer to my experiences.

He was never there until the day you weren’t
Lurking in the corners of your mind
Now he won’t leave you alone
He won’t go away and you find

You cannot forget
He was never there until the day you weren’t
Hasn’t he done enough?
How can you forget?

Now he won’t leave you alone
Just when you think you’ve forgotten
He springs and the nightmares come flooding back
He was never there until the day you weren’t

You never expected this,
Perhaps you were in the wrong place at the wrong time
Now he won’t leave you alone

Everywhere you turn, there he is
Even when he’s not.
He was never there until the day you weren’t
Now he won’t leave you alone.

Tuesday Treasure: Yellow and Pink Beaded Tassel Keyring

New in my store today:

Pink German Vintage Bead and Yellow Pearl Beaded Tassel Keyring

This tassel with yellow pearls, pink vintage German beads, and pink Swarovski crystals is so pretty, sweet, and feminine.
{Click the image to be taken to the Etsy store listing.}

I just love this color combination. The pale yellow thread is the perfect setting for the pink crystals and the yellow pearls.

Friday Feature: Getting Ready for Fall

I am in an awesome Etsy treasury, and it seemed very refreshing after all this summer sunshiny brightness. It reminds me of a dark, rainy fall afternoon, and that seems like just the thing as I sit melting in my living room on this hot summer day. I hope you enjoy it as much as I did.

‘ Dark Gray and Red ‘ by AngelaDesign


Sweater in dark bro…

$95.00

Dark Red Geranium P…

$8.00

Dark Grey and Red F…

$32.00

Dark grey red strip…

$35.00

Red rose necklace -…

$28.00

Womens Dark Gray Sw…

$62.00

Crochet Flower Toy …

$12.00

Geometric Bracelet …

$82.00

Vintage Skyway Lugg…

$23.95

20pcs Dark Red Cora…

$2.49

Red top – grey, re…

$47.00

10mm or 8mm 10pcs R…

$0.98

Stitched Heart Neck…

$12.00

Dark grey pill box …

$100.00

Handbag, bag, tote …

$78.00

ON SALE – Dark Red …

$79.00

Treasury tool supported by the dog house

And don’t forget, if you want to see the original treasury, just click the image above!

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