Interstate

Diamonds on the road
Flow down the asphalt
Trading partners,
Dancing down the distances

Flow down the asphalt
Passing time with competition
Dancing down the distances
Finessing the interstices

Passing time with competition
Merging boundaries
Finessing the interstices
Creating beautiful patterns.

Merging boundaries
Trading partners
Creating beautiful patterns,
Diamonds on the road.

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15 Comments

  1. perfectly fine tuned piece,
    love the word flow and everything.

    :)

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  2. Very clever word play – so effective :)

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  3. Yay– you did it! Great pantoum!

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  4. Impressive wordplay! I feel like singing it ;)

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  5. Your words just dance along creating beauty!

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  6. sheer beauty.. these diamonds.. your poem twinkles..

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  7. Silvertongue

     /  April 9, 2011

    Lovely flowing words! Thanks for sharing.

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  8. thingy

     /  April 9, 2011

    This was cool! Vroom, vroom.

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  9. satanshotel

     /  April 10, 2011

    I loved the wordplay, which concluded nicely at the end…well done!

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  10. The wordplay is wonderful, but I also enjoyed how your word choices set the pace of the poem.

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  11. there is beautiful flow to this poem, and the subtle repetitions make it so much more better! thanks for sharing!

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  12. Kay Salady

     /  April 18, 2011

    Wonderfully engaging poem that is very well written. Thank you!

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