In the Moment: Take Two

Within the moment truth
Arises unspeaking and silent
Opens the door to vision
Darkness hangs suspended
Arises unspeaking and silent
Moves shimmering into the world
Darkness hangs suspended
Awaiting the moment
Moves shimmering into the world
Glances become words
Awaiting the moment
The words are yet untrue
Glances become words
Open the door to vision
The words are yet untrue
Within the moment — truth.

This is a second version of a poem I put up on this blog last fall. Let me know what you think. Do you like the changes?

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2 Comments

  1. I love this so much. I haven’t read the original, but the choice of words you use, the rhythm and the flow are so beautiful – it makes the theme of the poem really work and something I can relate to.
    Keep up the good work!

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