Take Two: Sing of Living, Sing of Dying

Songs of ancestors echo our lives
Voices of the dead and people mingle
Call and response – hear the answer and ask
Telling the stories of tribal memory

Voices of the dead and people mingle
We are who you will be now, coming, forever.
Telling the stories of tribal memory
Carrying your lives into the dark time to come

Telling the stories of tribal memory
We are now what we will become
Voices of the dead and people mingle
Tell us who was, to remember

We are now who you will be now, coming, forever.
Sing us through the ages, carrying us back home
Carrying our lives into the dark time to come
A sacred responsibility.

We are now who we will become
Do this in memory of us, the living
Tell us who was, to remember
We are your voices, do not forget us.

Call and response – hear the answer and ask
Sing us through the ages, carrying us back home
Songs of the ancestors echo our lives
Do this in memory of us, the living.

An updated version of last Thursday’s poem, with improved meter.

Posted for Monday Poetry Potluck.

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14 Comments

  1. Wonderfully primal. Well done, Morganna. Thank you!

    Happy potluck!

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  2. super smart wording,
    living and dying, some die yet sprites alive, some live yet feel like dead body.
    very fine tuned poetry.
    Thanks for sharing with potluck.

    Here is one of my entries, an award is attached for you, thanks for the support on week 9.

    http://thursdaypoetsrallypoetry.wordpress.com/2010/11/08/my-sister-lives-too-far-away/

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  3. The back and forth of the repetition and the new words creates a mesmering rhythm– nicely done!

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  4. the title itself is catchy enough- nice write!

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  5. fabulously written. very wise poem morgana, thanks for sharing.

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  6. Luke Prater

     /  November 8, 2010

    A take on a pantoum? Nicely written, I like it a lot. The ancestors voices, the singing through the ages… very evocative. Very nice. A pantoum has been onmy list for a while. This week I have a rondeau and English Sonnet on offer…

    http://wp.me/pTeVg-cx
    http://wp.me/pTeVg-cP

    Cheers, Luke @ WordSalad

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  7. Very eloquent and feels like the Mists of Avalon. :)

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  8. Very beautiful and your take too is better…
    I liked it. thanks for sharing..

    ॐ नमः शिवाय
    Om Namah Shivaya
    Twitter: @VerseEveryDay
    Blog: http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com

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  9. This reads like a song. Absolutely lovely.

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  10. lol

    sweet :) loved it..

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  11. Very nice!

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  12. This really does read like a song, wonderful job!

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