Sing of Living, Sing of Dying

Songs of ancestors echo
Voices of the dead and people echo
Call and response – answer and question
Telling the stories of memory

Voices of the dead and people mingle
We are who you will be
Telling the stories of memory
Carrying your lives into the dark future

Telling the stories of memory
We are now what we will be
Voices of the dead and people mingle
Tell us who you were that we may remember

We are who you will be
Sing us through the ages
Carrying our lives into the dark future
A sacred responsibility

We are now what we will be
Do this in memory of us
Tell us who you were that we may remember
We are your voices, do not forget us

Call and response – answer and question
Sing us through the ages
Songs of ancestors echo
Do this in memory of us

Posted for Thursday Poetry Rally

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31 Comments

  1. Call and response – answer and question
    Sing us through the ages
    Songs of ancestors echo
    Do this in memory of us…

    love it.
    so well done.

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  2. Happy Rally.
    you know what to do, i assume.

    visit half a dozen fresh poets to explore if you wish.
    cheers.

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  3. I like this.. the interspersed form is so apt.. and my favorite was the fourth verse! :)

    My Entry For The Rally

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  4. Creative and interesting poem :)

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  5. G. K. Asante

     /  November 4, 2010

    I especially enjoy the call and response embedded into the poem.

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  6. I enjoyed the way you wrote your peom, innovative..

    Three Knots

    Happy Rally !

    –Someone Is Special–

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  7. The poetic form is wonderful!…however, its your use of echo that stands out the most. I find the true essence. the archetype, of echo is difficult to capture and convey..this poem honors and illustrates the rich nature of echo…

    beautiful…

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  8. wow..thats a lovely poem there :)

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  9. this poem is EPIC!! I read this with an epic guitar riff shredding my mind…so awesome. Hail the ancients; leave your mark to become a hailed one. nice work!

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  10. Jessicas Japes

     /  November 5, 2010

    That was very eerie, it created a picture of swirling mists and ghostly figures in my mind. Very clever.

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  11. Glory

     /  November 5, 2010

    so beautiful

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  12. Lovely poem, the use of repetition worked so well. Super job!

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  13. We are who you will be

    reminds me of a churchyard verse often found on tombstones: ” What you are we were and what we are you will become” but the voice here seems to really portray the oral tradition, the things people learn from their own culture’s past. Enjoyed it.

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  14. Very nicely done! Telling the stories of memory–repetition emphasizes the telling. Interesting poem.

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  15. i like your form… very nice!

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  16. Liz, some serious work here.. I wonder how well some of you guys do it- you included!! Very well crafted.. This is what I call a composition worth reading.. :)
    Loads of Love

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    • Thank you! How do I do it? Practice. Lots and lots of practice — continually consciously finding ways to improve, too. I have been writing poetry as long as I can remember and trying to improve it for the last 2 decades.

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  17. Great! Pantoum, so that is like a cascade somehow, with the repeated sentences?

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  18. loved it. felt like a chant which worked perfectly with the subject. great job!

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  19. Like this poetic form, beautifully written!
    All the best
    Marinela x

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  20. Ms. Peaches

     /  November 7, 2010

    “sing us through the ages…” great piece very beautifully written thanks for sharing and stopping by my spot I appreciate your comment and time. Cheers!

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