In Rome

Silent columns and benches rise
Around the deserted oval
Echoing the ancient cheers and screams.

Death once stalked this coliseum
Evil lurked in the arched doorways
Silent columns and benches rise

Testimony to time’s passage
The cheering men and women are dust
Around the deserted oval

Listen to the whispering breeze
Telling of men who fought and died
Echoing ancient cheers and screams

This is my entry for Jingle’s Thursday Poetry Rally

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41 Comments

  1. Silent columns and benches rise..

    love the word choices,
    very stunning poem!

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  2. Happy Thursday!
    I am thrilled to have your talent shared and enjoyed by others.
    have fun!

    participants list would be your first target…
    enjoy!

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  3. Great visuals with this poem!

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  4. …Testimony to time’s passage
    The cheering men and women are dust
    Around the deserted oval

    Listen to the whispering breeze
    Telling of men who fought and died
    Echoing ancient cheers and screams…

    …LOVE it!

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  5. thrilling poem

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  6. Someone Is Special

     /  September 9, 2010

    I am amazed reading this poem… I can visual it totally.. Loved it…

    Happy Rally…

    Sweet Dish

    –Someone Is Special–

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  7. Happy Thursday!

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  8. The sensory details here are breathtaking. Stunning piece.

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  9. mairmusic

     /  September 9, 2010

    The contemplative tone of this is captivating– each word seems carefully considered and rings true– nicely done!
    http://mairmusic.wordpress.com/

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  10. A chill went up and down my spine, and I got an eerie feeling, as if I was standing right in the center of the arena, with a lion staring at me…while I was reading this poem, power of the words well written to stir the imagination.

    Joanny

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    • I love making people feel things through my writing. It means a lot to me that you were that moved by this poem. Thank you for sharing.

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  11. oh my god!! This is amazing, Liz!! The picture you have painted is dark and sordid! But very real too!!
    You know what! Just last night, I read a poem by a friend (Chris G.)… it was on the same lines as yours! It’s quite amazing how both of you have written poems on the same subject! And he too is in the Thursday Rally! :) Here is the link to his poem, for you: http://cianphelan.wordpress.com/2010/09/08/deception/
    You will know what I mean…
    Happy Thursday, Liz!!

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    • Thanks, Kavita. His poem is really good too. Actually, a writing prompt blog I read (daily-writing.blogspot.com) had the prompt of ‘gladiator’ last week. I didn’t respond to the prompt there, but came up with this poem for the rally later. Did Chris G. read the same prompt? :)

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    • My ears are burning. I’m being talked about, aren’t I? :P

      It all comes back to Rome I suppose…nice to see the connection between us, though, no Morganna, I didn’t bring mine up from a prompt. Mine was spawned by dealing with politicians too often for my own good. Glad to see happy coincidence brought us together!

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  12. this is really good! loved the imagery..

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  13. So powerful filled with stunning images.
    Great work.

    http://angelacohan321.wordpress.com

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  14. Stunning poem, Lizbeth…I can feel the place! Despite its dark side, I rate ‘Gladiator’ as one of the best movies I’ve seen, brought immediately to mind by your amazing writing!

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  15. Great poem; the word choices remind me a little of Plath’s style– and I LOVE her! Keep up the great work :)

    P.s. Thanks for commenting on my poem x

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  16. Fabulous! I visited the colloseum in Rome and the amphitheatre in Pompeii a couple of years back, and those images came flooding back. Thank you.

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  17. Very strong image presented by these words. You do a really good job of painting a picture with your language.

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  18. Powerful, potent image, like a painting drawn with words. Somewhat dark, but the tone is engaging, and the words set my imagination into overdrive. Wonderfully writ, Morganna!

    And thanks for swinging by my blog–happy rally to you.

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  19. Inelle Zshayra

     /  September 10, 2010

    Brilliantly done! You are so clever! :) Keep it up!

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  20. A haunting poem. You really brought out the feeling and images here.

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  21. Something about the calm flow of the form and the violence of the content begin to bounce off each other. Works well, I enjoyed this. – bill

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  22. I loved the repetition in your poem; always pulling us back in time, and then to the present. “The cheering men and women are dust” was especially powerful.

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  23. nice description…

    nice theme and nice thinking :)

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  24. Calmly, civiilly evocative of a time and place that wasn’t calm or civil at at all. Nicely wrought poem and good choice for Rally. Congrats!

    Mine is here:
    http://wp.me/pne74-47b

    Happy poeming …

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  25. Ms. Peaches

     /  September 12, 2010

    great piece I’m glad I stopped by and thank you for checking me out!!!

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  26. You’ve done a fantastic job with this one

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  27. great visuals, i feel what it is like to be there

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    • Thank you everyone who has commented and made me think harder about what I wrote, how I wrote it, and what I meant to acheive. Thank you!

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  28. Great imagery. I especially enjoyed the personification of death and evil. Nicely done!

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  29. brilliant writing, I will come back soon to read some more, when time permits me, sob sob. Keep writing Kx
    http://kashaw.wordpress.com/2010/08/27/casino-jinks/

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  30. http://jinglepoetry.blogspot.com/2010/09/monday-poetry-potluck-kings-queens-and.html

    Hello, friend:

    Monday Poetry Potluck Is NOW open, linking is open from Sunday 8pm to Tuesday, 8pm, welcome join us by linking in 1 to 3 poems, you could use an old poem, the more you share, the happier we are…hurry up!
    Thanks in advance.
    Hope to see you in our lovely potluck…

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