He said it with laughter
His friend laughed and whispered.
They came for him.
They were waiting for him
At his mom’s, his girlfriend’s
He said it with laughter
They didn’t think it funny
And he had to flee
His friend laughed and whispered
He hid in the forest,
Living on the land, when
They came for him.
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For Thursday Poetry Rally at Jingle’s
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Jingle
/ August 11, 2010your new header is stunning,
so beautiful new template,
very profound poem…
welcome, have fun!
:)
Morganna
/ August 11, 2010Thanks for the header compliments. I’m glad you like the poem. I’m looking forward to this week’s rally!
THE BEATY
/ August 11, 2010I agree with jingle extremely profound and in a way tells a story wich is awsome
luisydomonique
/ August 11, 2010good luck!
buttercup600
/ August 11, 2010I read it again…very thought provoking and one can read more into it!! I love your work lovely lady…happy Rally!!!
Morganna
/ August 12, 2010Thank you … good to see you!
awallinsight
/ August 11, 2010i read this over and over too; it’s so powerful. the underlying dark emotion is beautiful
Morganna
/ August 12, 2010Wow. Thank you.
mstevensson
/ August 11, 2010Very interesting imagery, really gives a strong mental picture in very few words. Best regards.
Morganna
/ August 12, 2010That was my goal.
ambeywhaler
/ August 11, 2010I had to read this twice. Once because I read it at face value, and then looked into it. It seems like I should be in school analyzing this, but it’s much better than those poems.
Morganna
/ August 12, 2010Wow. Thanks for the compliment.
splashofexpression
/ August 12, 2010It reminded me of the barefoot bandit. Living carefree while everyone was laughing and cheering him on. Cool read.
Morganna
/ August 12, 2010I’m glad you liked it.
pete marshall
/ August 12, 2010it really does may you ask what it was he said, and if it was serious enough for them to come after and for him to hide, i shudder at its thought..cheers Pete
Morganna
/ August 12, 2010Some governments don’t like people talking about them.
brian
/ August 12, 2010ooo…leaves me wondering what exactly he did that they would come for him…chilling…
Morganna
/ August 12, 2010Irritated the wrong people …
megzone
/ August 12, 2010nice one..
but i wonder why they came for him for??
seems more like death came for him :roll:
correct me if m wrong though :?
im here from Jingle’s Rally
you can read my post at…
http://megzone.wordpress.com/2010/08/12/thursday-poets-rally-frog-prince-revisited/
Morganna
/ August 12, 2010It wasn’t meant to be death, but that’s a good interpretation too. :)
Jamie Dedes
/ August 12, 2010A bit disconcerting not only because “they came for him” but because we don’t know why … like Kafka’s prisoner who didn’t know why he was being punished. Nicely done. Welcome to Rally! :-)
Morganna
/ August 12, 2010I hadn’t thought of Kafka, but you’re right, it is a little Kafkaesque.
adeeyoyo
/ August 12, 2010Very interesting poem. Dark too. I like it very much.
Morganna
/ August 12, 2010I’m glad you do. Thank you.
suzicate
/ August 12, 2010what a story you’ve weaved leaving so many unanswered questions…very clever!
Morganna
/ August 12, 2010:) Thank you!
mairmusic
/ August 12, 2010Now THIS is a neat form! Did you make it up or is it traditional?
Morganna
/ August 12, 2010I did not make it up. I read another Rally entry using it once and asked about it and was sent this link: http://blog.writersdigest.com/poeticasides/2010/06/03/PoeticFormCascadePoem.aspx. Unfortunately, the article does not explain how old the form is.
frayedges
/ August 12, 2010Good flow, nice undertones. Like the rest I like what it doesn’t say.
Kavita
/ August 12, 2010There’s a lot more to this than appears to the eye…
The meaning is deep, and inspite of the laughing and giggling, I see hints of sadness melancholy in here…
“They” can strike anywhere, anytime! phheeww…scary!
Morganna
/ August 12, 2010Yes, very scary.
tasithoughts
/ August 12, 2010Amazingly deep and layered.
sgneist
/ August 12, 2010Intriguing and mysterious – reminds me of some Kate Bush lyrics :)
Ilakya Spandhanaa
/ August 12, 2010Very thought-provoking poem Morganna.. And you’ve said it in such simple words.. Truly Amazing..!! :)
Imagina
/ August 12, 2010A very dark and haunting poem… well done, Morganna :)
revbillcook
/ August 12, 2010Enjoyed this. It makes me want to know what else happens. – Bill
h0ll0wd0ll
/ August 13, 2010A nicely written poem, with a dark and disturbing undertone. Well done.
carolina
/ August 13, 2010“they” seem to be a nuisance! I love it!
Morganna
/ August 13, 2010Oh, they are, they definitely are.
sillyfrogsusan
/ August 13, 2010Read this several times…each took on a new meaning.
Exceptional piece!
Morganna
/ August 13, 2010Thank you!
Ms. Peaches
/ August 13, 2010what an ominous feeling this poem gives me…makes me want to know more…nice work…thanks for sharing.
http://peachpitproduction.wordpress.com/2010/08/12/plum-nutt-fool/
joanny
/ August 14, 2010Love your new header good choice.
The poem was clever, and left us wondering what he did, but glad we didn’t really know,.
Nicely crafted.
Joanny
deadpoet88
/ August 14, 2010This gave me the feeling of “1984” -George Orwell. Where free speech is suppressed, well that book went a step further and sh0wed how free thought could be suppressed as well. Great piece, very profound and important message.
Morganna
/ August 14, 2010Yes, it is an important message. Thank you for seeing that. I enjoyed 1984, but it sure gave me the creeps.
ladyg83
/ August 14, 2010Wow, I really liked that. Nice writing style!
trisha
/ August 16, 2010wonderful poem. beautiful.
Leonnyes
/ August 16, 2010nice versing of thoughts… tercets are difficult to pull off for me, but u did it effortlesly :)
Morganna
/ August 16, 2010Thank you very much.
PinkLady
/ August 17, 2010what a profound, thought-provoking, delightful and brilliant piece, morganna!
Morganna
/ August 17, 2010Thank you so much!
nanno1982
/ August 17, 2010i always loved this form of poems :)
And you gave it a lovely essence too
Morganna
/ August 17, 2010Thank you. I’m glad you liked it.
Jingle
/ August 18, 2010visit them back if you are free….
I am collecting your poem for Promising Poets Parking lot..
:)
Morganna
/ August 18, 2010Thanks :)
mangoesntangoes
/ August 18, 2010Interesting poem..I had to read it couple of times to understand it. It seems rather simplistic but there is more to it as you sit back and think about it.
Nelly
/ August 19, 2010what
i love it
http://nellyulima.wordpress.com/
Chloe
/ August 20, 2010Wow – I’m not sure where you are based, but I am here in the UK….this poem reminds me of a recent tragic event where a crazed man shot a number of people (including a policeman) and he went in hiding in the local countryside…eventually he was tracked down and he shot himself after a few hours stand-off with police. Like your character, he was living off the land and nobody thought his actions were funny…
His name was Raoul Moat…in case you fancy checking him out…crazed mad-man that he was.
Morganna
/ August 20, 2010Well, I hadn’t heard of him and not quite what I had in mind, but I always love hearing what my poems make people think of.