They: Poetry Rally Entry

He said it with laughter
His friend laughed and whispered.
They came for him.

They were waiting for him
At his mom’s, his girlfriend’s
He said it with laughter

They didn’t think it funny
And he had to flee
His friend laughed and whispered

He hid in the forest,
Living on the land, when
They came for him.

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For Thursday Poetry Rally at Jingle’s

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  1. your new header is stunning,
    so beautiful new template,

    very profound poem…
    welcome, have fun!
    :)

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    • Thanks for the header compliments. I’m glad you like the poem. I’m looking forward to this week’s rally!

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  2. I agree with jingle extremely profound and in a way tells a story wich is awsome

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  3. I read it again…very thought provoking and one can read more into it!! I love your work lovely lady…happy Rally!!!

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  4. i read this over and over too; it’s so powerful. the underlying dark emotion is beautiful

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  5. Very interesting imagery, really gives a strong mental picture in very few words. Best regards.

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  6. I had to read this twice. Once because I read it at face value, and then looked into it. It seems like I should be in school analyzing this, but it’s much better than those poems.

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  7. It reminded me of the barefoot bandit. Living carefree while everyone was laughing and cheering him on. Cool read.

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  8. it really does may you ask what it was he said, and if it was serious enough for them to come after and for him to hide, i shudder at its thought..cheers Pete

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  9. ooo…leaves me wondering what exactly he did that they would come for him…chilling…

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  10. nice one..
    but i wonder why they came for him for??
    seems more like death came for him :roll:
    correct me if m wrong though :?

    im here from Jingle’s Rally
    you can read my post at…
    http://megzone.wordpress.com/2010/08/12/thursday-poets-rally-frog-prince-revisited/

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  11. A bit disconcerting not only because “they came for him” but because we don’t know why … like Kafka’s prisoner who didn’t know why he was being punished. Nicely done. Welcome to Rally! :-)

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  12. Very interesting poem. Dark too. I like it very much.

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  13. what a story you’ve weaved leaving so many unanswered questions…very clever!

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  14. mairmusic

     /  August 12, 2010

    Now THIS is a neat form! Did you make it up or is it traditional?

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  15. Good flow, nice undertones. Like the rest I like what it doesn’t say.

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  16. There’s a lot more to this than appears to the eye…
    The meaning is deep, and inspite of the laughing and giggling, I see hints of sadness melancholy in here…
    “They” can strike anywhere, anytime! phheeww…scary!

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  17. Amazingly deep and layered.

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  18. Intriguing and mysterious – reminds me of some Kate Bush lyrics :)

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  19. Ilakya Spandhanaa

     /  August 12, 2010

    Very thought-provoking poem Morganna.. And you’ve said it in such simple words.. Truly Amazing..!! :)

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  20. A very dark and haunting poem… well done, Morganna :)

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  21. Enjoyed this. It makes me want to know what else happens. – Bill

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  22. A nicely written poem, with a dark and disturbing undertone. Well done.

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  23. “they” seem to be a nuisance! I love it!

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  24. Read this several times…each took on a new meaning.
    Exceptional piece!

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  25. Ms. Peaches

     /  August 13, 2010

    what an ominous feeling this poem gives me…makes me want to know more…nice work…thanks for sharing.

    http://peachpitproduction.wordpress.com/2010/08/12/plum-nutt-fool/

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  26. Love your new header good choice.
    The poem was clever, and left us wondering what he did, but glad we didn’t really know,.

    Nicely crafted.

    Joanny

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  27. This gave me the feeling of “1984” -George Orwell. Where free speech is suppressed, well that book went a step further and sh0wed how free thought could be suppressed as well. Great piece, very profound and important message.

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    • Yes, it is an important message. Thank you for seeing that. I enjoyed 1984, but it sure gave me the creeps.

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  28. Wow, I really liked that. Nice writing style!

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  29. wonderful poem. beautiful.

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  30. nice versing of thoughts… tercets are difficult to pull off for me, but u did it effortlesly :)

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  31. what a profound, thought-provoking, delightful and brilliant piece, morganna!

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  32. i always loved this form of poems :)
    And you gave it a lovely essence too

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  33. visit them back if you are free….

    I am collecting your poem for Promising Poets Parking lot..
    :)

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  34. mangoesntangoes

     /  August 18, 2010

    Interesting poem..I had to read it couple of times to understand it. It seems rather simplistic but there is more to it as you sit back and think about it.

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  35. Chloe

     /  August 20, 2010

    Wow – I’m not sure where you are based, but I am here in the UK….this poem reminds me of a recent tragic event where a crazed man shot a number of people (including a policeman) and he went in hiding in the local countryside…eventually he was tracked down and he shot himself after a few hours stand-off with police. Like your character, he was living off the land and nobody thought his actions were funny…

    His name was Raoul Moat…in case you fancy checking him out…crazed mad-man that he was.

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    • Well, I hadn’t heard of him and not quite what I had in mind, but I always love hearing what my poems make people think of.

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