Poetry Rally Entry

Flowing
Cool blue water
Drifting away to sea
Carrying tales of the mountains
Amazing whales with thoughts of legged ones
Flying in the breath, sunbathing
Running without water
River carries
Stories

A rictameter, although, to be a strict rictameter, I should have made the last line the same as the first.

This is my entry for Jingle’s Thursday Poetry Rally.

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  1. beautiful,
    love the idea of sailing to sea with the tales of mountains…

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  2. andyveilleux

     /  June 17, 2010

    This poem has a great few closing lines:

    “Flying in the breath, sunbathing
    Running without water
    River carries
    Stories”

    Thanks for sharing :)

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  3. beautiful form, though I’m not familar with rictameter, I think you did a fine job,love images of mountain and ocean.

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  4. hey that was beautiful…
    i havent tried a rictameter yet..
    should try it once :)

    m here from Jingle’s Rally
    you can read my poetry at
    http://megzone.wordpress.com/2010/06/17/thursday-poets-rally-a-stroll-through-neverland/

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  5. Nice poem.

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  6. Nine lines with nine lives of their own flowing peacefully into a very nice story!

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  7. That’s a neat form. Your poem reads well backwards too. Enjoyed it! thanks

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  8. Doni Cifra

     /  June 17, 2010

    must read up on rictameter…

    discovered you in the Rally… nice discovery indeed

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  9. what a cool river you created with your words…carrying stories…from the mountains…nicely done.

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  10. I could “feel” every word you so eloquently wrote. Beautiful and thanks for visiting my blog:)

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  11. mairmusic

     /  June 17, 2010

    Cool! I don’t know that form at all– great to see.
    http://mairmusic.wordpress.com/

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  12. Short but beautiful! The imagery is amazing. Great job!

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  13. Please return favors to poets who were here,
    Thank you in advance…
    everyone needs encouragement…
    Happy Friday!
    ;)

    I have sent this to every poet in my list.

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  14. trisha bora

     /  June 18, 2010

    love the form. feels like a wave.

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  15. simply divine. its full of dream and beauty.

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  16. I adore your style of writing ,,, Enchanting, the ocean and the moon are always my favorites themes for writing and reading other poet’s works.

    Lovely,
    Joanny

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  17. i loved the idea of river carrying stories.. that part has some depth in it.. very well written! (:

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  18. sad that that beautiful scenery is being polluted…lets capture beautiful memories. i love your wistful voice.

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  19. Congratulations on winning the award. oxo

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  20. water carries all the story with it..Nice one :)

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  21. running without water, water carries, stories…!

    <3 simply awesome!

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  22. Chloe

     /  June 27, 2010

    What a lovely concept that the water carries stories from the mountains! Very beautiful. Thanks.

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